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Topics:Crime & Punishment Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both of these two views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many people are convinced that understanding the issue behind a crime and the prime motivation must be taken into consideration
while
 deciding the punishment for the crime.
However
, I strongly opine that there should be a decided punishment for a felony. In
this
 essay, we will discuss why I support the latter. On the one hand, if there isn't a decided penalizing structure for each felony committed;
as a result
, lawyers and criminals will try to escape the committed crime by expressing a fake reason for committing it.
However
, Motivation does matter;
therefore
, in rare
cases
, it is up to the judge to decide the reason behind doing something illegal and evaluate the circumstances. To cite an example, A recent report published about murders in the Times of India says that 17
percent
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 of the
cases
 happen as an act of protection.
Therefore
, In some
cases
, the final call must be evaluated by the judge.
On the other hand
, Having a decided law helps save court
time
. As per Hindustan
Time
 Journal, the criminal
cases
 filed in the high court take around 5 years in India.
Thus
, having a fixed law will help to reduce the argument
time
 and lead the issue towards a conclusion. In the same way, The Indian penal court has too many
cases
;
thus
, reducing the
time
 taken for each trial is significantly important. From my perspective, having fixed penalizing norms helps save
time
 and leads the case to justice faster,
Consequently
 reducing the
time
 of the judicial system.
Thus
, I am in the support of the same
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your essay is well-organized, with clear paragraphs and a logical flow of ideas. You've done this well, but further refinement can help to more coherently connect your ideas.
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Continue to use specific examples to support your points, as you've effectively done in your essay. This strengthens your arguments and helps the reader understand your reasoning better.
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While your position is clear, further exploration of contrasting viewpoints could provide a more rounded discussion. Even though you've discussed an opposing view, further elaboration on why you disagree with it could strengthen your argument.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • legal framework
  • culpability
  • judicial process
  • efficiency
  • flexibility
  • minor infractions
  • harsh penalties
  • equality before the law
  • biases
  • subjective judgments
  • root causes
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • reintegration
  • societal safety
  • judicial discretion
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