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Write a letter to the course director. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course.

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Dear Mister or Missis. I am writing to you with my personal feedback about your cookery school. In fact, I just want to notify you about a course that amazed me. First of all, I definitely enjoyed the teaching staff, who pointed to my every mistake to advance my cooking skills.
Also
, I liked the course stuff, everybody had his own cooking place where they could make their own masterpiece.
Overall
, I learned a lot of meals to do,
such
 as steak, barbecue and some types of cakes.
However
, I stopped being afraid of plates and boiled oil. In the future, I decided to buy a new course about "How to open your own restaurant", because I want to receive some money for my cooking skills. Well, I hope that you will like my feedback letter. Hope that you will be pleased after reading that. Yours faithfully Diluc.
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Greeting and Closing
Your opening and closing are polite but could be a bit more formal. For example, using 'Dear Course Director' can make it sound more appropriate for the context.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and to demonstrate a wider range of language skills.
Task Achievement
Consider adding more detail about specific aspects of the course that you found beneficial or interesting to strengthen your feedback.
General Language Accuracy
Be cautious of small errors in spelling or word choice, as correcting these can make your writing appear more polished.
Task Achievement
You've effectively conveyed your positive experience with the course, which is central to the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is organized in a logical manner, with each paragraph introducing a new point. This helps in maintaining coherence.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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