The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.

The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.
The given line graph illustrates the
number
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of
shops
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opened and closed in a country during the span of eight years (between 2011- 2018). Units are in numbers.
Overall
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, the maximum
number
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of
shops
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opened was
during
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in
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2011
whereas
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,
highest
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the highest
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number
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of closures occurred
during
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2015.
To begin
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with, during 2011 the
number
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of opened
shops
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was around 8500.
However
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, there was a drastic dip in that
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in 2012 i.e. just under 4000. The
number
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began to rise and reached almost 6000 in 2014. Moving on, the
number
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of
shops
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opened during 2015 – 2017 was quite stable. (approximately 4000 in each year) The
number
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of
shops
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closed during 2011 was a little over 6000, which reached its highest point in 2013, with a total closure of 7100
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approximately. The
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slumped drastically during 2015, with a total closure of roughly 500
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.
However
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, the
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leveled off during 2016-2018 with
total
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a total
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closure of 5000
shops
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approximately.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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