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2)Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: ● Explain why you cannot go anymore ● Say who can go instead of you ● Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear Mukul, I hope you have been keeping well. I am utterly devasted to let you know that I won’t be able to come with you to the
movie
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 we had planned to watch
this
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 weekend. Let me explain you
further
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. I am sorry that I can’t watch the
movie
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 that we had planned to go
together
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to together
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 because my parents have met with an accident and
are
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have been
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 admitted
in
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to
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the
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apply
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hospital. It is a tough time for my family and I being the eldest of the siblings in our home, have support and take care of my loved ones. I hope you can understand my problem. But I have a solution
for
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to
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 our problem. I have informed
Rahul
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, one of my
co-worker
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co-workers
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 at my office, to accompany you to the
movie
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. I have known
Rahul
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 for 5 good years and he
a
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is a
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happy-go-lucky person.
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, as
Rahul
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 could not book tickets for
this
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movie
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, he can use mine. It’s a win-win situation for both of you. You will surely enjoy his company as he is an extrovert person and a big
movie
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 buff just like us.
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, he is a
die hard
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die-hard
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 fan of Iron
man
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Man
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 movies
which
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. I have asked
Rahul
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 to pick and drop you at your location after the show. I hope you will understand my situation. Yours lovingly Ajay

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Style
Try to vary your sentence structure to add more depth to your writing.
Vocabulary
Consider using a wider range of vocabulary related to the context for an even richer response.
Explanation
You clearly expressed the reason for your unavailability.
Solution
You provided a suitable alternative, making your response practical and considerate.
Tone
The tone of your letter is appropriately apologetic and understanding, fitting the situation perfectly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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