You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages? Write at least 250 words.

Some people believe that college
students
in a few nations
live
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with their
relative
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relatives
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while
they pursuing
degree
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a degree
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is better than struggling alone
altough
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although
in other nations
students
register
to
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for
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the
campuss
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campus
campuses
outside their city.
This
essay is to give an opinion
between
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on
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the
advantage
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advantages
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of living independently
compare
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compared
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to living with relatives during the study period. In terms of accessing facilities and needs for learning outside the faculty area, living with family members will give the
students
many benefits
such
as time
efficient
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, expert guidance, and transfer knowledge activities are easy to get.
Moreover
, they can focus sharply on digesting material given by the teachers and gaining
an
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apply
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excellent
result
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results
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.
However
, they are quite awkward
on
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in
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solving their problems.
Difference
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The difference
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with
students
whose
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who
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choosing
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to leave their homeland to go to
other
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another
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area and
pursuing
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pursue
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their degree apart from their family, they
shows
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a
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apply
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better character individually
due to
they have to solve their own issues with
a
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seldom
helps
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help
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from their closest person.
Nevertheless
, they act freely to choose what they want in life and sometimes it will bring them to unnecessary problems. In conclusion, living closer
with
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to
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your family members when you are still studying in college is not an absolute advantage in
a
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the
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long term
while
deciding to live away from parents or
sibling
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siblings
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not
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does not
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significantly give you much trouble. It depends on how the
students
optimize their situation and condition to solve their own problems. Both of
it
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them
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will give the advantage if they can act wisely.
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balance
Remember to address both sides of the argument throughout the essay, not just in the conclusion. This will provide a more balanced perspective and help better fulfill the task requirements.
introduction
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balanced view
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conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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