The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over among the US, Sweden and Japan.

The information about the percentage of

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having

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age

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aged

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65 and above in countries

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the US

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, Sweden,

Japan

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and Japan

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is depicted in the given line graph. The information is calibrated in the form of

percentage

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. The most striking feature of the chart is that the maximum growth of population is seen in Japan,

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the resident's growth in the USA was

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. In terms of Sweden, the number

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people started with an initial figure of 7% in 1940

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increased and reached

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just below 15% in 1880 before inclining exponentially to 25% in the year 2040.

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, in 1940,

population

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the population

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of Japan accounted for 5% which fell significantly and remained

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at 3

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% till 1980 and ultimately reached a peak at 27% in 2040. With respect to the USA, in the initial

years

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it had

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percentage of

population

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the population

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around

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10%, and by 1980 its citizens reached to

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one-quarter

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, it later followed a declining trend and reached a

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plateau

at just under 15% until 2020 before reaching

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23% in 2040.

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