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Working from home is becoming more popular. What are the reasons? Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?

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Home-based
work
 has become increasingly prevalent.
This
 essay discusses the causes of
this
 trend and explains why I believe it is a beneficial development. There are two main reasons why more
people
 are choosing to
work
 from their homes.
First,
working from one’s residence leads to higher productivity.
This
 is because it eliminates the distractions that come with working in an office.
For instance
, when working from home, I do not get distracted by my co-workers stopping by my desk to ask me unnecessary questions.
Furthermore
, it saves a lot of time. The reason for
this
 is that less time is wasted in traffic to go to an office.
Therefore
, there is more time for non-
work
 activities. I believe
this
 is a positive phenomenon. The most significant benefit is that it creates a better
work
-life balance. By enabling
people
 to choose when to
work
 and take a break it is easier to fit
work
 around other commitments.
This
 can be particularly useful for
people
 with children or other caregiving responsibilities. Another benefit is that it is better for the environment. Eliminating the need to commute reduces pollution and the consumption of fossil fuels. In conclusion, the motives for more
people
 working remotely are
due to
 them being able to
work
 more productively and avoid the daily commute to the office. I think
this
 has a positive impact as it helps
people
 balance their
work
 and other commitments better and it is more environmentally friendly.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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