Studies suggested that nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons? And what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things?
In the present day,
television
is watched by children
so much more than they did in the past and they are lazier in active and creative. This
is a suspicious problem in the younger and it comes from some reasons made by parents
and society but it can fixed with many solutions. Firstly
, kids
watch television
because it has many entertainment programs and provides so much happiness for children
. The pleasure with youths is pretty simple because they always are attracted by a sparkle, a colorful
screen, or a funny song. Change the spelling
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For example
, there are a lot of cartoons and funny programs that are made every day, some programs are very famous such
as “Tom and Jerry”-cartoon,” Baby Shark”-music. It not only “entices” the children
but also
charms many adults. Secondly
, in a family, teenagers can learn from their parents
and most people on normal days always want to sit on the sofa, bring some food and watch television
to enjoy, the kids
look at this
action and imitate the things their parents
did. For instance
, some families have a hobby which is watching television
in the evening and when they go to do work, they forget to manage the time their child watching TV. From that, youngsters spend so much time watching everything that cannot be managed by the father or the mother. Despite having many reasons repairing it is not hard and we will have some solutions to do that. Change preposition
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parents
, we should manage the time Change preposition
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kids
to
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television
and what they will be watching to ensure the healthy development of children
. the sire can watch television
2 to 3 hours a day and use some apps such
as YouTube Kids
to watch friendly content. Society and the government need to create some rules that do not allow kids
under 3 or 6 to watch television
and they also
sensor bad content to not damage the younger’s mental. In conclusion, there are so many reasons for this
problem. To solve that we need the
combination of Correct article usage
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parents
and society for the comprehensive development of youngerSubmitted by dohuyhoang on
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structure
Try to organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific aspect of the topic. For instance, one paragraph for reasons why children watch more TV, and another for suggested solutions.
examples
Introduce specific examples to support your points. While mentioning 'Tom and Jerry' and 'Baby Shark' is a good start, try to delve deeper into how these shows impact children's behavior directly.
clarity
Avoid general phrases and try to be more specific in your language. For example, instead of saying 'it can fixed with many solutions', specify 'it can be addressed with targeted solutions'.
introduction/conclusion
You've provided a clear introduction and conclusion which frames the essay's main points effectively.
examples
Your usage of examples such as 'Tom and Jerry' and 'Baby Shark' to illustrate points brings your arguments to life.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion