Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Day by day, tuition by online platforms, becoming more common, we have
people
we
believe that computer-based Correct pronoun usage
who
education
have
more advantages or other teenagers Change the verb form
has
consider
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who consider
the
conditional study, indispensable.
All types of tuition have Correct article usage
apply
advantage
and Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
disadvantage
, but I consider that studying Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
which
other Correct your spelling
with
people
more useful method of studying
In online learning, young students can find new friends around the world to enter the
environment of like-minded Correct article usage
an
people
. In addition
, the use of online sites has been improved since artificial intelligence was integrated. For example
, some teachers have been replaced by intelligent robots that can answer any
complex questions and solve them in a short period of Correct quantifier usage
apply
time
. As a result
, people
no longer need to pay fees to study at universities in order to gain knowledge for free, but you can't do it everywhere through online education
and online learning limits a child’s physical development
On the one hand, standard learning has fewer distractions in gaining information. The main reason for this
is that the lessons are teacher-centred due to
there is only one educator for the whole class and students can not ask their questions due to
lack of time
or even attention. Therefore
, this
teaching method leads to less concentration for student in the classroom which will directly affect their academic performance
On the other
hand
when children study in standard Add a comma
hand,
education
, they will spend most of their time
at school and will have little time
for family games or simply spending time
with their families. But it helps to be disciplined
Additionally
, I suggest traditional studying, bring
more Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
benefit
, even if online tuition Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
easier
than learning face-to-face, Add a missing verb
is easier
but
conventional Correct word choice
apply
education
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Coherence & Cohesion
Clarify your introduction with a clearer stance and briefly outline the points you will discuss.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on paragraph structure to properly separate discussions of online and traditional education.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your conclusion effectively summarizes your discussion and clearly states your opinion.
Task Achievement
Provide clear, specific examples to support each point you make, helping to illustrate your arguments.
Task Achievement
Aim to maintain a balance in discussing both views before stating your opinion.
General
Consider revising for grammar and punctuation to enhance the overall clarity and professionalism of your writing.
Task Response
You engaged with both views on the topic, showcasing an understanding of the discussion.
Task Response
Your essay demonstrates a genuine effort to engage with the topic and provide personal insights.
Fully explain your ideas
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