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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 word

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Environment
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The environment
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 is important for the survival of all species. It includes all the living and non-living matter. The preservation and destruction
creates
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 an
equilbrium
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equilibrium
 of sustainability.The
intercations
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interactions
interaction
 between the animate and inanimate matter
leaves
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 a long-lasting impact.
Rapid
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The rapid
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 acceleration of development in the modern world filled with
conveneience
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convenience
had
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has
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lead
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led
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 to impacts that cannot be
reveresed
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reversed
 easily. An individual alone cannot act to save the
environment
.
However
, if all individuals are willing to protect the
environment
 with greater responsibility, it would be much more
efficinet
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efficient
 than any other
solutions
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solution
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. The
governments
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government
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regualtes
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regulates
regulate
 the usage and disposal of certain products.
The corporations
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Corporations
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 follow these standards. The manufacturing and disposal
is
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are
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 tightly
regualted
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regulated
 and some companies pay a hefty
environement
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environment
environmental
 fee for waste disposal. Every product eventually ends up being bought by an individual. The individual might or might not be fully aware of the harmful effects of the product.
Eventually
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Eventually,
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 after serving the advertised
purpose
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purpose,
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 the product might end up in the
environment
. A
single use
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single-use
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 plastic
cups
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cup
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 used by millions of individuals will end up as a large landfill over
years
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the years
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.
This
 could change the symbiotic nature of the
environment
while
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and
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 the governments might end up spending a lot to solve
this
 problem which would lead to a waste of money. The collective act of both individuals and
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the governement
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governement
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government
 is
neccessary
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necessary
 to improve the
overall
 quality of the
environment
 we live in.
Government
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The government
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 should provide clear instructions, transparent policy and meaningful solutions so the collective outcome of both would end up in a successful outcome for
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survival.
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Introduction
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Conclusion
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Content
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic, discussing the roles of individuals, governments, and corporations in preserving the environment.
Language
Nice usage of language and varied sentence structures that provide clarity and keep the reader engaged.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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