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The graph below shows the top priorities by business companies in the USA in 2016.

The graph below shows the top priorities by business companies in the USA in 2016.
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The
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bar chart gives some information about the percentage of top priorities by business
companies
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 in the USA in 2016. Looking for an
overall
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 perspective, it can be clearly seen from the graph that converting contracts and increasing
number
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 of contacts had the highest percentage compared with other actions.
To begin
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 with, business
companies
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 which had less than 25 employees had the least reducing the cost of
contract
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.
Furthermore
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, providing ROI of marketing activities and increasing revenue in
this
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 type of
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companies
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company
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 had 33% and 43% respectively.
Likewise
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, the
companies
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 that had 26 to 200 employees were more interested in increasing
number
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the number
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 of contracts, comprising 79%.
While
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 converting contacts had 73% in these
companies
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, Providing
RoI
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 and increasing revenue were equal, reaching approximately 50%.
On the other hand
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,
companies
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 with over 200 employees had one-third of reducing the cost of different positions
while
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 other actions had almost half of the priorities between 55% and 66%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words companies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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