The graph below shows the top priorities by business companies in the USA in 2016.
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bar chart gives some information about the percentage of top priorities by business Verb problem
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companies
in the USA in 2016. Looking for an overall
perspective, it can be clearly seen from the graph that converting contracts and increasing number
of contacts had the highest percentage compared with other actions.
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the number
To begin
with, business companies
which had less than 25 employees had the least reducing the cost of contract
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the contract
Furthermore
, providing ROI of marketing activities and increasing revenue in this
type of companies
had 33% and 43% respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
company
Likewise
, the companies
that had 26 to 200 employees were more interested in increasing number
of contracts, comprising 79%. Correct article usage
the number
While
converting contacts had 73% in these companies
, Providing RoI
and increasing revenue were equal, reaching approximately 50%.
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ROI
On the other hand
, companies
with over 200 employees had one-third of reducing the cost of different positions while
other actions had almost half of the priorities between 55% and 66%.Submitted by arman802001 on
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