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Some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and gove your opinion.

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In the present age, some groups of
people
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 believe that
friends
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 should have the same ideas and agree with you,
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 others say that
friends
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 should have differences between them. in my opinion, I agree that
friends
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 should disagree sometimes with each other and I am going to describe both two ideas in the next paragraphs. On the one hand, many
people
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 believe that
friends
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 should have many similarities and resemblances between them that could lead to a good relationship and build it strongly.
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, many individuals feel more comfortable if they have in common things with others. because they will think that they are normal if they see many
people
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 agree with the same as them.
On the other hand
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, others stand with
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 should disagree sometimes with each other, which might
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mainly lead to negative consequences.
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, some debates end with disagreement of
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 because they think that they are not meant to be with each other.
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. in my opinion, I think that
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 should have disagreements about everything sometimes because differences make what we call right now ourselves and combine each other.
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, If we had a disagreement with something that could lead to learning from each other. Because we might not know what to do if we agree on everything the whole time. In conclusion, I believe we have disagreements sometimes with our
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 because I think that what makes it a good relationship and to know our differences and to know more about each other.

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Make sure to clearly state both perspectives in your introduction and summarize them effectively in your conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to sentence structure and punctuation to improve clarity. Avoid overly complex sentences that might confuse readers.
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Expand on your examples to make them more relevant to your main points. This will help support your arguments better.
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You have successfully presented both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of essay.
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Your personal opinion is clearly stated, which adds strength to your essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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