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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

#internet #people #platform #believe #books
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In the present world, the way to obtain
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 isn’t
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 to
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books
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 and school. Nowadays, learning through
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internet
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 is much more popular. It is agreed that
one
 day education will digitalize to
an
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the
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 extent that
books
 are replaced.
This
 will be
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 by discussing the differences between
portable
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the portable
a portable
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device
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devices
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 and physical
books
, and
the
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how
paper
books
 have
contribute
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 to environmental issues.
Firstly
, the
internet
 has several advantages compared to
books
.
Internet
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 provides
enormous
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an enormous
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 amount of know-how
while
books
 contain limited
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 in limited pages.
In other words
,
books
 take up weight
as well as
 volume, it
requires
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require
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 a considerable amount of
spaces
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space
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 for storage,
while
Internet
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the Internet
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 simply puts its
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 on the web and
one
 can access
to
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it merely through
website
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a website
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.
Moreover
,
Internet
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the Internet
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 surpasses limitations in real life, which means, it is possible to search for any resources regardless of
ones
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one's
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 position and situation.
Thus
,
it is clear that
Internet
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the Internet
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 is
more
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preferred considering
portability
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its portability
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, efficiency, and the unlimited resources that
Internet
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the Internet
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 could possibly bring.
Secondly
, deforestation has always been a serious issue
that is
 strongly connected to climate change.
According to
researches
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research
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, there is
average
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an average
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one
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of one
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 tree being cut down every second in the world. What’s worse,
paper
 happens to be
one
 of the main products produced from trees.
However
, with the
internet
, we came up with a new way of storing our precious information.
Therefore
,
books
 will be less needed when human collects information online.
Besides
, unlike
paper made
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books
 that will break down after decades, there
is
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are
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 no time limitations to
Internet
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the Internet
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!
Thus
,
books
creates
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 environmental concerns
while
Internet
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the Internet
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 provides a solution to solve
it
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them
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.
To sum up
, It can’t be
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 more that the
internet
 possesses
of
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several
advantage
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advantages
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 that
books
 can never exceed.
Internet
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The Internet
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 elevates our way of learning, we can learn whenever and wherever we want.
Also
, It is more logical and economical to choose
Internet
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the Internet
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 over
paper
. It is predicted that digitalization
would
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will
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 soon be evolving the world.
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Sentence Structure
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Argument Depth
Providing counterarguments, even if briefly, could make your argument more robust by acknowledging alternative viewpoints.
Grammar/Terminology
Consider revising the essay for minor grammatical errors and to ensure the use of the correct terminologies, such as 'knowledges' to 'knowledge.'
Spelling
Be cautious with spelling and ensure that all words are correctly used and spelled, for example, 'know-how' (knowledge), 'informations' (information).
Argumentation
You effectively argued in favor of digital learning over traditional books, making a compelling case.
Topic Engagement
The essay captures the essence of digital transformation in learning, emphasizing the practical benefits of internet-based education.

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