The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the present world, the way to obtain

knowledges

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knowledge

pieces of knowledge

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isn’t

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book

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books

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and school. Nowadays, learning through

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the internet

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internet

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is much more popular. It is agreed that

one

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day education will digitalize to

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extent that

books

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are replaced.

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will be

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by discussing the differences between

portable

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the portable

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device

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devices

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and physical

books

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, and

the

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apply

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how

paper

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books

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have

contribute

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to environmental issues.

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, the

internet

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has several advantages compared to

books

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Internet

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provides

enormous

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an enormous

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amount of know-how

while

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books

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contain limited

knowledges

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knowledge

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in limited pages.

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books

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take up weight

as well as

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volume, it

requires

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a considerable amount of

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for storage,

while

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Internet

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the Internet

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simply puts its

informations

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information

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on the web and

one

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can access

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apply

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it merely through

website

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Moreover

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Internet

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surpasses limitations in real life, which means, it is possible to search for any resources regardless of

ones

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position and situation.

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it is clear that

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Internet

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the Internet

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apply

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preferred considering

portability

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its portability

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, efficiency, and the unlimited resources that

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Internet

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the Internet

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could possibly bring.

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, deforestation has always been a serious issue

that is

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strongly connected to climate change.

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researches

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, there is

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one

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tree being cut down every second in the world. What’s worse,

paper

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happens to be

one

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of the main products produced from trees.

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, with the

internet

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, we came up with a new way of storing our precious information.

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books

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will be less needed when human collects information online.

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, unlike

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paper made

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books

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that will break down after decades, there

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are

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no time limitations to

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Internet

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the Internet

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Thus

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books

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creates

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create

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environmental concerns

while

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Internet

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the Internet

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provides a solution to solve

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them

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, It can’t be

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more that the

internet

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possesses

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apply

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several

advantage

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advantages

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that

books

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can never exceed.

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Internet

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elevates our way of learning, we can learn whenever and wherever we want.

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, It is more logical and economical to choose

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Internet

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over

paper

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. It is predicted that digitalization

would

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soon be evolving the world.

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Grammar/Terminology

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Spelling

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Argumentation

You effectively argued in favor of digital learning over traditional books, making a compelling case.

Topic Engagement

The essay captures the essence of digital transformation in learning, emphasizing the practical benefits of internet-based education.

Your opinion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

328 words

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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

Your opinion

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Technology has had a large impact on the way people consume news. As a result, newspapers and magazines will disappear in the near future and be completely replaced by online news sources.

Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job, but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.