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the best way for a country to prepare for the future is to invest in young people. do you agree or disagree ?

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It is
undeniable
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 fact that that today’s youth is the future of the nation.
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, I personally agree with
this
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 opinion that for growth and development, it is important to invest in
education
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 and
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health
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the health
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 care system to help
younger
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the younger
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generation
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 to
give
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make
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 a contribution
for
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to
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 the
future’s
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future
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 country.
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 with, investing in
education
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 for the young
generation
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 is
primary
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a primary
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 priority.
School
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Schools
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 should have a curriculum that
facilitate
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facilitates
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 children to enhance their abilities
either
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apply
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in science, technology, engineering, and mathematics (STEM)
as well as
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 in arts and humanities.
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,
this
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 investment will diverse range of careers and
to
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apply
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stimulate
the
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apply
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innovation within the state.
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, there are many secondary and higher
educational-level
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educational levels
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 in Indonesia that facilitate children’s interest
such
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 as vocational high school or college specialized in arts and engineering.
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,
enhance
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enhancing
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 the nation’s ability in
health
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 care systems
are
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is
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also
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 important. Ensuring the younger
generation
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 to have a good mental and a strong physics ability
are
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is
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 a wise choice to prepare the future of the country. Because, even though they have a higher
education
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, it will be useless if they can not contribute to
its
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their
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 nation
due to
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health
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 problems.
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, there
are
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 a routine check-up for
the
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apply
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primary and secondary school students from public
health
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 care to prevent pupils from non-communicable diseases
such
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 as obesity and anaemia. To summarize, the best way to prepare the future’s nation is to
investing
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invest
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 in a young
generation
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. I certainly agree
for
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country
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the country
a country
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 to prioritize improvement in
education
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 and
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health-care
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healthcare
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 systems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • entrepreneurship
  • mentorship
  • economic diversification
  • civic engagement
  • leadership training
  • cultural exchange
  • interconnected world
  • robust curriculum
  • hands-on skills
  • job-ready
  • self-reliance
  • physically and mentally healthy
  • active participants
  • global understanding
  • stimulate
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