Some people believe that technological advancements have made our lives simpler and more convenient, while others argue that these developments have led to a loss of important life skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Society
believe
that Change the verb form
believes
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technology
advancements made Replace the word
technological
life
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more
easier and better because of a wide range of advantages. Change the word
apply
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While most
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Most
community
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communities
is
not in favor Correct subject-verb agreement
are
due to
a loss of important Linking Words
life
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skills
. For me, Use synonyms
technology
helps in different Use synonyms
aspect
of Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
life
but it Use synonyms
also
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have
a downside in certain Change the verb form
has
aspect
of Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
life
.
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while
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apply
technology
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have
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has
a broad information
regarding the trends of what is happening Remove the article
broad information
a piece of broad information
around
. It Correct pronoun usage
around us
also
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enhance
our knowledge, Change the verb form
enhances
skills
, Use synonyms
capability
, and it Correct word choice
and capability
give
insights to many people. Change the verb form
gives
For example
, students can simply grasp information anytime and anywhere when they are seeking Linking Words
for
a question that needs an immediate answer.
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apply
On the other hand
, the argument Linking Words
that
reliance Add a missing verb
is that
to
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on
technology
can lead to a degradation of basic Use synonyms
skills
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such
as navigation of places without using a map, manual calculation, or even social interactions without social mediation. There is Linking Words
also
a concern that Linking Words
younger
generation Correct article usage
the younger
tend
to depend on social media for solving problems that were previously navigated by using critical thinking and interpersonal Change the verb form
tends
skills
.
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To conclude
, the Linking Words
balance
perspective Change the verb form
balanced
that
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is that
while
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technology
can lead to a person's lack of Use synonyms
skills
, competency, capability, and enhancement, there is a need for a conscious effort to preserve and cultivate traditional Use synonyms
skills
and ensure that Use synonyms
technology
complements rather than replaces human capabilities.Use synonyms
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Task Achievement
Clarifying your opinion more definitively in your essay would strengthen your argument. Consider stating more explicitly how technology impacts life positively and negatively.
Task Achievement
Integrating more varied and specific examples to support your points could elevate your essay. This helps in making your arguments both more concrete and persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay benefits from a generally good structure, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. To enhance coherence, consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to more effectively guide the reader through your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on paragraph development. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea followed by supporting sentences that elaborate on that idea. Aim for each paragraph to flow logically to the next, building your argument.
Task Achievement
You have successfully addressed both views of the issue, providing a balanced perspective in your discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall structure of your essay is logical, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that discuss each view, and a conclusion that summarizes your own opinion.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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