Parents of obese children should be punished for making them fat. Do you agree or disagree?
The parents of kids who suffer from
obesity
should receive punishment for allowing them to become overweight. Use synonyms
This
essay disagrees with Linking Words
this
statement because Linking Words
obesity
can be caused by genetics and Use synonyms
children
often eat unhealthy Use synonyms
food
outside of the home.
Parents are not present when Use synonyms
children
consume most of their Use synonyms
food
. When Use synonyms
children
are at school they eat snacks and have lunch and the adults have no control over their dietary intake during Use synonyms
this
time. A child could consume the vast majority of their calories during these unsupervised periods, without their mother and father's knowledge or permission, and much of Linking Words
this
intake could take the form of junk Linking Words
food
. Use synonyms
For example
, a recent study found that primary school students consume an average of 75% of their daily recommended calorific allowance during school hours.
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Also
, Linking Words
obesity
not only comes from bad eating habits, some people can't lose weight Use synonyms
due to
their heredity. The metabolic process in the human body controls how fast organisms will use consumed calories. Linking Words
Therefore
if someone has a slow metabolism, they are naturally inclined to gain more fat. Even when the child is active and eats healthy it is not a guarantee for him being skinny. Linking Words
For instance
, it was found that 30% of the Linking Words
children
in North America suffer from morbid Use synonyms
obesity
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due to
genetic disorders.
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To conclude
, parents should not be under government control if their kids are overweight. Cause influence of junk Linking Words
food
outside of the home and heredity can't be fixed by mothers and fathers to force Use synonyms
children
to lose weight.Use synonyms
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