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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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It is claimed by some individuals that all
experiments
 on
animals
 are detrimental effect and should be removed,
while
 others support that notable scientific
discoveries
 are able to be made from animal
experiments
. As far as I am concerned, even though there
will be
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are
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 crucial
discoveries
are
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apply
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capable of being made from animal works,
it
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they
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 ought to be cancelled. First of all, one of the main
reason
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reasons
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 is that all
animals
 play a vital role in the forest.
For instance
, despite completing the variety
functions
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of functions
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, the studies show that the number of
experiments
 on
animals
,
such
 as rabbits,
are
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is
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 increasing day by day at an alarming rate.
Therefore
, the government should
removed
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 all
experiments
 on
animals
, in spite of causing
sientific
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scientific
discoveries
.
Secondly
, there are many alternatives for scientific
discoveries
in stead
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instead
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 of
animals
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animal
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experiments
. If people prefer to do
experiments
 on
animals
, the number of
animals
, which are faced
this
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with this
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 situation, will lose their bio-diversity, in the future.
As a result
, it leads to
disappear
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the disappearance
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 of the forests. In conclusion,
although
 it is believed by some individuals that crucial scientific improvements can be made from animal
experiments
, others, including myself,
assest
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argue
 that all experimentation on
animals
 is the worst situation and should be eliminated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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