In some countries, some people are renting accomodation, while other are buying their own homes. Does renting accomodation have more advantages or more disadvantages than buying a place?
In the modern world, there are so many
people
struggling to purchase their own homes, but others choose to rent accommodation
, instead
. both of the two ways have their own advantages and disadvantages. In my perspective, I think renting accommodation
has benefits that outweigh its drawbacks. In this
essay, I will discuss it.
To begin
with, there is one
main reason that renting accommodation
actually benefits significantly for citizens which comes from the price of it. For
this
reason, nowadays, the prices of buying houses
are escalating every day, then
they directly cause
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causing
people
not to be able to afford their own houses
or flats, cite an example, In Korea, the value of a place in the city exceeds over 1 millions dollars which is unthinkable for ordinary employees. As a result
, renting becomes an ideal solution for people
with a better price, people
will no longer be under pressure to buy a house that they may have to work entirely for their life also
not able to afford. In addition
to prices, living in a rented place can help them become more mobilizable to move away or relocate their work easier not like permanent houses
while
you have to sell them before moving out. Besides
, renters also
reduce the amount of bills for roads, facilities, and infrastructures which will be paid by lordlands. Because of those benefits, there are so many people
choosing to rent over purchase one
.
On the other hand
, for long-term vision, taking a temporary flat might be not as economical as buying one
. For example
, if you choose to buy an estate, the value of it will increase over time which is a great help for their children later on, while
the world becomes more competitive each year. Furthermore
, for those who want to settle down permanently, buying their own homes will outweigh renting while
in a given time, facilities will be worn out then
they do not need to move out too frequently. In spite of these advantages of buying a house, renting a place is still a great idea for such
a competitive society as now, they will take off the pressure of affording accommodation
and enjoy their life in the present, and use most of their money to invest in children's education.
In conclusion, Although
buying a house can bring a lot of positive things such
as economic aspects, estates for their children, and a permanent settlement, renting one
may outweigh this
with a better affordable ability, the reduction of annual bills for bills, and especially taking off the pressure of buying houses
as many people
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General
Ensure clarity and precision in your argumentation. Although your essay is strong, some points can be articulated more clearly to avoid any ambiguity. This will enhance the reader's understanding and engagement.
Task Achievement
In discussions of advantages and disadvantages, maintaining balanced coverage ensures a well-rounded argument. While your essay leans towards supporting renting, consider adding more detail about the advantages of buying to fully address the prompt.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider variety of cohesive devices and transition words. While your essay is well-structured, utilizing a broader range of linguistic tools will enhance the flow and coherence between ideas.
Structure
You provided a well-structured essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
Use of Examples
Your inclusion of examples, such as the housing market in Korea, adds relevance and depth to your argument, effectively supporting your main points.
Tone & Engagement
The personal tone and engagement with the topic provide an appealing readability, making your argument relatable and accessible.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
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