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In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in water, so people think that they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or dis-agree?

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Many believe that
plastic
 bags are the primary cause of waste, polluting land, and water, so they should be banned. I completely agree with the statement.
Plastic
 is both harmful and non-biodegradable. When
plastic
 is
disposed
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 outside, it takes around 10 years for a
plastic
 bag to be broken down and absorbed by the environment. Sometimes people tend to burn
plastic
 causing to it release toxins into the air, which
is
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are
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then
 inhaled by the community. In a recent article from Times of India, it was stated that
majority
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 of the landfills are created just to dump millions of
plastic
 wastes produced by the country every month. Not only is
plastic
 harmful for the land and human beings
,
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, but
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its
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it
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also
effects
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affects
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 the lives of aquatic animals. Fishes mistake
plastic
 waste for food and try consuming them,
this
 results in
chocking
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choking
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 or
it
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apply
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getting tangled around the animal causing health issues or difficulty for the animal.
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, every year around 20000 turtles are saved by marine biologists from
chocking
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choking
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 on
plastic
 bags
disposed
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disposed of
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 by cruise ships.
This
also
 causes
threat
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 to extinct turtle species. In conclusion,
plastic
 might be cheap and convenient to use. But its negative
affects
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effects
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 on the environment and the animals
outweighs
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outweigh
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 the pros of
plastic
.
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