The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sprots between 2008 and 2014 and the second one shows the number of children who paticipated in three sports in Britain over the same period.

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sprots between 2008 and 2014 and the second one shows the number of children who paticipated in three sports in Britain over the same period.
The first chart depicts the average expenditure on
children
's
sports
each month by British parents
while
the second illustrates the
number
of
children
taking part in three
sports
in Britain at the same time.
Overall
, it can be seen that the money spent on
children
's
sports
witnessed a gradual rise
while
the
number
of
children
taking part in three
sports
experienced growth in the period time in question.
Besides
, football was the most popular sport.
To begin
with, in 2008 the
number
of football participants started at around 8
million
children
and it
then
relatively remained stable in 2010.
However
, the figure significantly rose to 9
million
children
in 2012 and continuously went up in 2014. If we look at swimming, the trend is similar. The
number
of
children
opting into swimming began at around 2
million
and the figure
then
sustainably increased and reached around 3.75
million
children
.
Lastly
, in the first two years, the
number
of
children
who participated in athletics was unchanged at under 1
million
but it
then
remarkably increased to 5
million
in 2012.
However
, the figure experienced a slight decline
at
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around 4.5
million
in 2014. Moving on to the other categories, there was a substantial growth in the amount of money spent on
children
's
sports
by British parents each month which started at 20 pounds and peaked at 33 pounds in 2014.
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