Some people belive that technology has man made more social. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

A group of
people
think that technology has made
world
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more
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closer and communities even more social than ever before. From my perspective,
it
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is true to a great extent and there are a myriad of reasons for
this
.
To begin
with,
the
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technology has given rise to numerous apps
such
as
facebook
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Facebook
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,
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and instragram
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instragram
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Instagram
and provides many features that are beyond imagination like chatting,
video
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and video
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calls which
causes
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people
to communicate easily with each other whether verbally or through written texts. Nowadays,
people
can make friends from foreign countries which brings about an intercultural exchange among
people
. Certainly, it has a positive impact on human
relationships
and networking.
For instance
,
people
do interracial marriages which is
due to
friendships created on social media sites.
Besides
this
, it has made life easier and provided different choices
to
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people
to choose from the
relationships
online or offline.
Moreover
, means of transportation help
people
to
convey
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to various places in a short period of time and have changed how offices and
relationships
work.
For example
, if any close friend invites someone for a birthday party and arranges it in a far city,
then
it is easy for that individual to commute to his venue easily. Definitely, it provides him a social relaxation and satisfaction.
To conclude
,
the
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technological advancement has made life easy which
further
helps in creating
relationships
,
developing
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and developing
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and nurturing them in a fruitful way. At
first,
it offers many features to communicate comfortably and
then
it provides conveyance which has brought
world
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closer and has reduced the traveling time to various locations.
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