In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?
With
the
medical technology advancing day by Correct article usage
apply
bay
, Correct your spelling
day
ageing
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the ageing
population
had became
a serious social issue for developed countries. Wrong verb form
has become
While
many people believe that ageing
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the ageing
population
presents challenge
for Add an article
a challenge
government
, others Correct article usage
the government
thinks
that it would Change the verb form
think
have
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be
benefits
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beneficial
of having
more elderly in Change preposition
to have
the
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apply
society
. The greater number of elderly benefits society
outweight
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outweighs
drawback
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drawbacks
have
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has
became
a hot controversy.
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become
Firstly
, it is essentially
to consider the burden of elderly Change the word
essential
brings
to the economy. In most cases, Correct subject-verb agreement
bring
elderly
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the elderly
requires
more medical support and allowance from Change the verb form
require
society
. Even though some of them can pay by
their own, Change preposition
on
but
as far as I Correct word choice
apply
knew
most elderly medical fees in Hong Kong are funded by Wrong verb form
know
government
. Add an article
the government
For instance
, my grandfarther
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grandfather
have
lots of health Correct subject-verb agreement
has
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
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, hospital
just Add an article
the hospital
charge
him around $180 per time. Change the verb form
charges
This
is not enough for covering
the expense Change preposition
to cover
for
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of
hospital
. With more elderly in Add an article
the hospital
a hospital
society
, it would be require
more funding from Change the verb form
require
government
. And it would Add an article
the government
be impact
the taxation.
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impact
In contrast
, despite there are drawbacks of having many elderly in our society
, there are
still positive feedback Change the verb form
is
of
having Change preposition
about
elderly
in Correct article usage
an elderly
society
. Usually, older citizens have more experience in their life
. They are better Fix the agreement mistake
lives
in
managing wealth and Change preposition
at
respect
rules. They have more potential to become the leader. And they can share valuable Wrong verb form
respecting
experience
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experiences
to
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with
younger
generation. Add an article
the younger
a younger
For instance
, my grandfather always take
part in community service Change the verb form
takes
leader
. Leading teenagers to help the vulnerable groups. And he will share precious ideas Replace the word
leadership
to
teenagers.
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with
To sum up
, while
ageing
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the ageing
population
might bring burden
to Correct article usage
a burden
government
economy, the benefits Correct article usage
the government
elderly
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the elderly
brought
cannot Wrong verb form
bring
be avoid
. The wisdom and Change the verb form
be avoided
intelligent
of Replace the word
intelligence
elderly
can bring positive feedback to Correct article usage
the elderly
society
. Therefore
, the benfits
of having an ageing Correct your spelling
benefits
population
outweight
the Correct your spelling
outweigh
outweighs
disadvantage
.Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
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