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The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The graph illustrates the prices of three items
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such
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as
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Copper
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,
Nickel
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, and Zinc every month in 2014. In general, there was a
dramatical
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dramatic
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 fluctuation in three metals from January to December.
In
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At
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 the beginning of January 2014,
Copper
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 experienced a downward trend from 6% to 4% in February.
In addition
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,
Copper
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 and
Nickel
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 had a downward trend which noticeably decreased proportion by 1% in only five months from January to May. The lowest percentage of price was
Nickel
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 by -3% in June.
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Although
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However
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, it increased gradually for
next
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the next
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 month and remained steady respectively between July and September.
Otherwise
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, both
Copper
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 and
Nickel
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 jumped sharply in November around 1,5%.
Conversely
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, in comparison with the price of Zinc, which witnessed a gradual drop to -1% in June, the price remained steadily similar
with
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Copper
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 and
Nickel
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 followed by July, August, and September.
On the contrary
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, it increased slowly between November and December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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