Some people think that certain wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are some good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Around the world,
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are kept in
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.
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, there is much controversy about whether there are enough positive reasons for
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trend or if they should be set free. I do agree that some
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should not be in
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.
Zoos
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can be crucial for the survival of many
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species
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. As an example, the Bango Tiger and the African lions, which are endangered
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that almost vanished from African land, were saved from extinction because
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helped keep them alive. If
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did not help by facilitating the procreation of endangered
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, many
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would not have survived for so long.
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, the population of those
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is increasing.
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, several drawbacks can be seen for
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held in captivity.
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,
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have very high levels of stress in
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. When big
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such
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as lions, tigers, and many others are kept in zoo cages, they feel extremely disturbed because they do not have enough space to move around.
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in the wild have more than 100 times more land space than they normally have in cages around the world.
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,
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lose their ability to hunt when confined.
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,
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need to feed their
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, not allow them to practice their killing skills as they would in the wild.  In my opinion, not all
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should be in
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. Endangered and extinct
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should be the main targets of
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,
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should only have selected
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in their possession. In conclusion, even though
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can somehow positively impact wild
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’ lives, the drawbacks are far worse and should be taken into consideration.
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Provided specific examples to support arguments, such as the mention of endangered species like the Bengo Tiger and African lions.
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Maintained a clear stance throughout the essay, effectively ending with a reasoned conclusion that reflects upon the introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • captivity
  • natural habitat
  • artificial enclosures
  • genetic diversity
  • animal welfare
  • conservation efforts
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • education platform
  • breeding programs
  • reintroduction
  • psychological suffering
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