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The two pie charts provide the information about the increase and decrease of the world population in a century.

The two pie charts provide the information about the increase and decrease of the world population in a century.
The pie chart illustrates
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the number of world
population
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 in 1900 and 2000.
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, there was no dramatic change between 1900 and 2000. In 1900, Asia
was having
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 the highest amount of
population
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 in the world with
total
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60
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of 60
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%
from
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 1.6 billion
people
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. Europe was the second place with 400 million
people
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 and Latin America
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 the lowest rank of human
population
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 with 480.000
people
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. In 2000,
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, Asia Pacific led the position for having almost 4 billion
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. Europe
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at
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the
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second place with 8.4 million
people
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. North America tend to
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 the exact percentage as they had in 1900 before.
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 Africa
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 rose from 4% in 1900 to 10% in 2000, there was
also
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 an increasing number until 5% in total on Latin America’s
population
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.
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 East and North Africa had a small
population
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 number
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only 6%
from
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 6 billion in total.

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