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The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.

The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.
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The given maps depict some changes occurring on an
island
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 called Paradise.
Overall
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, the most striking feature is that Paradise
Island
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 has become more modern over the given period of time, moving away from a green
area
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 to a convenient
area
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 with more specific technical places.
To begin
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 with, rocks and
beach
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beaches
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 along the
island
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 have stood still
while
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 the pier has been expanded. A natural spring has remained unchanged but a cafe
area
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 and a scenic lookout have been built near it. The green
area
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 in the centre of the
island
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 has been demolished for the construction of an open restaurant, a BBQ
area
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 and a cycle path. Moving on to the other changes, the scientific research station on the left of the
island
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 has been removed to build a hotel complex and a swimming pool.
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, a boat which was close to the pier has been replaced by a cruise ship.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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