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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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vehicle-free
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 have safe and clean cities so they encourage
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 place.

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structure
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language use
Use a variety of sentence structures and try to vary your vocabulary to express your ideas more clearly and effectively.
content depth
Include specific examples to support your arguments. These examples make your points more convincing.
accuracy
Review grammar and spelling to ensure your essay is as clear and accurate as possible. Minor errors can distract from your overall message.
balanced discussion
You provided a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of the topic.
conclusion
You concluded your essay by reiterating your opinion, which is good for cohesion and task response.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vehicle-free days
  • public transport
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • sustainable
  • healthier lifestyles
  • obesity
  • foot traffic
  • community engagement
  • logistical challenges
  • banning vehicles
  • supply chain issues
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • urban planning
  • environmental benefits
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