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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate how the habitats of Ryemouth have developed over two different time periods
from1995
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from 1995
 compared to the current year.
Overall
, housing
is
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 obviously expanded from minimal habitats to
be
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crowded in the north.
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,
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civilization
are
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 replaced the green spaces
by
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sport
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 clubs,
shop
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shops
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snd
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and
 fish
market
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markets
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 are turned into
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and apartments.
While
 fishing
port
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ports
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are
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 disappeared, both
cafe
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cafes
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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have
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are
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 located in the southeast. In 1995, Ryemouth
is
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was
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 a small community which had a few
household
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households
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 and some businesses that were
hotel
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hotels
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 and
cafe
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cafes
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, one-fourth of the village in the east was the agricultural and natural zone. Fishing was
the
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 popular occupation by appearing a big port and
the
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several
of
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the
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fish markets and shops
in
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on
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 the south border by the sea. At
the
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present, the increasing
of
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population is significantly
appearing by
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increasing
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 the number of houses
is
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greater
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likewise
the
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commercial seafoods are reconstructed to be used
as
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in
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the
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residential
area
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areas
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.
In addition
, golf
field
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fields
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 and tennis courts are new facilities which
instead
 of the farming forest area, the shopping
center
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centre
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 are
took
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taken
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 over by restaurants. On the other hand,
the
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fishing is not
counting
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counted
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 as
a
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local
working
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,
the
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 main port is destroyed
from
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by
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 the sea,
However
,
hotel
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the hotel
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 and cafe are still as same as
a
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previous
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previously
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,including
car
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a car
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 park
is
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added supporting next to
hotel
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the hotel
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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