Many people use written language in a less formal and more relaxed way. Why? Does this developm advantages and disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no doubt that these days more and more people use written
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lowest formal and easy way. The question is، why
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like easy written
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, use less formal and relaxed
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. The main
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reason
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claim is that easy for more people. To illustrate, if you want to send a message to your friend you will
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less formal and relaxed way.
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, after your friend receives the message, they can simply understand you. Before two
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Expand your essay to fully address both parts of the question: reasons for using relaxed language and its advantages/disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
Use a clearer introductory paragraph to outline the essay's structure and main points.
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Add more specific examples and evidence to support your points. Consider including personal experiences or observations.
coherence cohesion
Improve the essay's organization by using distinct paragraphs for introduction, each main point, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Work on the clarity of your writing by using sentences that are complete and grammatically correct. Reading widely and practicing your writing can help improve these skills.
task achievement
You chose a relevant topic and showed an understanding of the general idea behind why people may prefer less formal language.
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Starting to discuss the advantages of relaxed language was a good attempt to address the task, though further development is needed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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