The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie chart illustrates the generation how old the the percentage of younger
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of
population
of Yemen and Italy in 2000 is and gives a prediction
for 2050. I will compare the differences / changes in the ages of the people
in both countries
.
We can see from the data on Yemen that in human
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humans
age
range
under 14 years
old is the most
highest in 2000. But in 2050 it is predicted to have 57.3% of midteens the middle Change the adjective
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age
group
has the majority instead
. While
the elderly people
have
the lowest Wrong verb form
had
range
percentage of 3.6% of the population
in 2000. Moreover
the number of teenagers and adults between 15 to 59 Add a comma
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will
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increased
up to
2050.
Italy had a huge Change preposition
by
population
of 15 to 59 years
old counted amounting to/ of
61.6% in 2000.
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prediction
for this
age
group
is expected to go down to 46.2%. Also
/In addition
the elderly are predicted as the second highest population
while
the rate of birth of children is declining.
In summary /conclusion, the changes in population
in the two countries
are very different. Whereas
the middle age
group
in Yeman
went up, In Italy it went down about Correct your spelling
Yemen
same
amount/percentage. In both Correct article usage
the same
countries
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,
people
decreased about the same.
However
/On the other hand
, in the two countries
the elderly
increased, but in Correct quantifier usage
number of elderly
Italy
the numbers rose more.
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Italy,
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pie chart illustrates the generation of the Correct your spelling
The
population
of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and give
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prediction
for 2050.
We can see from Add an article
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this
data that in human age
range
under 14 years
old is the most in 2000. But in 2050 it is predicted to have 57.3% of midteens and group
has the majority Correct article usage
the group
instead
. While
the elderly people
have the lowest range
for 3.6% of the population
in 2000. Moreover
the number of teenagers and adults between 15 to 59 Add a comma
Moreover,
years
old are increase in 2050.
Italy have a huge population
on
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of
years
old counted 61.6% in 2000.
And in prediction
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prediction,
this
age
group
is expected to go down to 46.2%. Also
the elderly are predicted as the second highest population
while
the rate of birth children is declining.Submitted by nugentsr on
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