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The charts below show the survey results for which environmental problems people in three countries are most concerned about.

The charts below show the survey results for which environmental problems people in three countries are most concerned about.
The given pie charts illustrate information on
of
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the three environmental issues which
is
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people
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 more
concern
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 about in 3 different
country
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countries
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.
Overall
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,
people
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 from
Zambia
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 and Singapore
is
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are
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 more concerned about
overpopulation
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,
while
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 in Cameroon
people
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worried
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are worried
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 about
waste
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 disposal. In all three
countries
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countries,
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pollution
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 is the least concerning among all other categories of issues, but in
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Zambia
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Zambia,
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 the least place is
also
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waste
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 disposal.
According to
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 the charts, in
Singapore
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Singapore,
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 there is the highest
percentage
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 of
people
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 who
concerned
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are concerned
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 about
overpopulation
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with
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 37%, followed by global warming
with
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 26%.
Waste
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 disposal figures accounted for 21% of Singaporean
people
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,
while
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 the lowest
percentage
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 of
people
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 worried about
pollution
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 with 16%. In
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Zambia
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Zambia,
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 there is
the
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 similar trend,
overpopulation
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 and global warming experienced the
most
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percentage
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 with 43% and 29$, respectively.
However
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, In
Zambia
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,
waste
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 disposal and
pollution
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has
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have
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 the same
percentage
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 of 14%.
In contrast
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, In
Cameroon
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Cameroon,
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 the highest
concerning
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concern
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 among
people
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 is
waste
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 disposal with 42%, followed by
overpopulation
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 with 23%. Global warming has the figure at 19%, and
pollution
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 is the least concern among
Cameroonian
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Cameroonians
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 with 16%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, zambia, overpopulation, waste, pollution, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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