The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018
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The line graph compares two types of
shops
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which the
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of closed and new opened in a country in seven years
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,
shops
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that closed dropped significantly in that period but
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rate grew
at the end
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of the term. The
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of closed
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did not observe very much
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, it declined final stage. The
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of closed
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changed its grade several times between 2011 and 2014 from 5500 to 7100 respectively but the line graph shows that its amount had a significant reduction in 2015 by nearly 500. At that time opens did not have as quick plunge. After that time closures grew just above 5k in 2016. The next 3-year closure grade changed between 5k and 5,2
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The amount of opened
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decreased sharply to 4k in 2012
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it increased to 6k from 2012 to 2014. At that time the total of department stores started to drop by 4k and 4,1k respectively. In 2018 it reached its lowest point in 8 years approximately 3k in 2018. The graph below shows the
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of
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that closed and the
number
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of new
shops
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that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number, k with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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