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The bar charts shows Estimated world illiteracy rates, by regionand by gender, last year

The bar charts shows Estimated world illiteracy rates, by regionand by gender, last year
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The bar chart illustrates estimations
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illiteracy
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rates
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 of different regions by gender.
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in
 developed countries most of the population is able to write and read,
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 patterns for
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the South
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 Asia region are the highest .
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, it is apparent that in all regions the proportion of women who are illiterate is more than
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, for highly-developed nations
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 are almost 3% which is the lowest.
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 Latın American and Caribbean states one-tenth of
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 population cannot read or write ,
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 for females these figures are slightly higher (13% approximately).
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 percentages of both sexes in East Asia/Oceania is wider compared to other parts of the world (approximately 8% and 20% for males and women,respectively). The remaining three regions ,
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, show greater patterns. in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia
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 are around a third.
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 terms of women these numbers are almost two times higher than men's. 55% female population of South Asian countries is not able to write or read ,which is the highest. In Sub-Saharan Africa and Arab
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 are around 48% and 53% , respectively.
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