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The chart below gives the percentage of social media users by age in Jamestown in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives the percentage of social media users by age in Jamestown in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart depicts the proportion of
people
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 from Jamestown who used social media in five different
age
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 groups in the year 2018.
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, it can be seen that a large majority of the digital platform
users
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 were under 35
years
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 old, whilst the amount of
users
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 in other
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 groups
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 much smaller.
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 with, up to three-quarters of social platform
users
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 were under 35
years
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 old.
People
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 the range of 13 and 25
years
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 old made up two-fifths,
while
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users
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 between the ages of 26 and 35 generated more than a third of the digital platform
users
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.
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 contrast,
people
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 of the other three
age
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 groups only accounted for a quarter of the total
users
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. Only 15
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 of the
users
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 were
people
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 aged 36 to 45.
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, the proportion of
people
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 who used social media was as low as 8
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 for the
users
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 that were 46 to 55
years
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 old.
People
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 over the
age
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 of 55 accounted for a very small proportion.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, users, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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