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The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table clarified the best ten states consumed
network
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networks
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 around the world.
Overall
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, the proportion of
internet
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 users
are
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is
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 closed among these states. We notice that the power nations
has
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have
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high
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highly
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 used the
internet
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 by their citizens.
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, in
UK
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the UK
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 , Japan,
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the U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
, and Germany the percentage of
who
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those who
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 inter the Google and other network sites are 92.6%, 91.1%,88.5% and 88% respectively.
While
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 the proportion of those who
are
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use
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 used
internet
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 in
china
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China
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, India, Brazil, Russia and Mexico
are
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is
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 less than
the
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in the
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 above countries.
Also
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,
lndia
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India
 and Nigeria
are
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have
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less
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fewer
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users
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uses
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users
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 than other
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apply
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our
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apply
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countries, the amount of those who
used
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use
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internet
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the internet
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 in
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these
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this
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these
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 countries is 34.8% and 46.1%. We notice from the statistics that the amount of consumed
internet
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 in America and Europe
are
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is
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 higher than
Asia
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in Asia
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 and Africa.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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