The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

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The maps illustrate the comparison of one of the villages in Stockefored and its surroundings in 1930 and 2010.

Overall

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, it can be seen that the number of houses increased

as a result

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of many nature reserves and gardens being replaced with modern buildings and facilities for living.

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with, numerous farmlands that were first located in the east and south of Stokeford in 1930 were replaced with retirement homes in 2010 in several areas of the village.

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, the primary school near the garden in 1930 still remained in the same area.

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, to the south of the elementary school, the garden area has been transformed into homes for people who have already retired.

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, the two shops near the post office have vanished,

whereas

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the post office has stayed the same. The total number of houses in 2010 has risen compared to 1930

due to

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the reduced green space.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

153 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

transformation
infrastructure
facilities
landscape
sparse population
residential areas
commercial zones
recreational facilities
agricultural lands
local economy
transportation infrastructure
connectivity
public amenities
green spaces
quality of life
historical buildings
landmarks
preservation
urban development
environmental impacts
natural landscapes

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The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

What drives your interest in applying for the IISMA program

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast transport for cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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