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The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000

The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000
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The line chart gives information about how
much
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many
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hours
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spend to make
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were spent making
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 a
refrigerator
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 in three
business
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businesses
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 from 1990 to 2000.
Overall
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, over the one decade, the
hours
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 of
Company
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 A and B have a similar trend and
steadly
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steadily
steady
decline
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declined
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 the
time
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 to create a
fridge
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.
In addition
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,
Company
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 C
shown
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shows
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same
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the same
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 amount of
time
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 to make a
refrigerator
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 at the same period. Turning to the data more in detail, in 1990
Company
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 A made a
refrigerator
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while
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for
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 30
hours
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 and
Company
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 C created a
fridge
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35
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for 35
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hours
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.
However
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, in 2000, both
of
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apply
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companies gradually decreased
fridge
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 creation
time
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approximately
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by approximately
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 23
hours
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 and 33
hours
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, throughout the period shown in the chart,
Company
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 B maintained equal
hours
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 to make a
refrigerator
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 around 27
hours
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 between 1990 and 2000. Notably,
Company
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 B
were
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apply
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surpassed the
time
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 to create a
fridge
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 by
Company
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 A middle of
betwwen
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between
 1990 and 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, refrigerator, company, time, fridge with synonyms.
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