The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
The line graph illustrates the number of people per week that visited different clinics of a hospital from the years 2010 to 2016.
Overall
, all data had fluctuations but the birth control clinic
had the most patients in the beginning. However
, it was suppressed by the eye clinic
in the end.
Firstly
, birth control health centres started around 250 and increased to 270 infirm in the year
2012. Nevertheless
, it dropped vigorously to 170 one year
later. It ended with about 240 patients. In the same way, the diabetic clinic
had visitors around 60 at the start of the period which is the lowest among the 4 clinics. It increased a little bit to nearly 100 and maintained for the next 2 years. Conversely
, it increased significantly to almost 170 in the year
2016.
Meanwhile, the dental polyclinic had an initial number of 100 patients which dropped to 50 and then
increased to approximately 130 which managed to maintain to around 140 at the end
of the period Lastly
, the eye clinic
began at around 120 and showed an upward trend till the year
2016. It climbed to 150 one year
later. In addition
, it continued to grow to 250 then
stopped at 350 people a week finally
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