Today's society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today's lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
In the contemporary modern world, people are more
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about their Replace the word
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weight
and part of the
society believes that Correct article usage
apply
best
method to lose Correct article usage
the best
weight
as
diet and exercise Correct your spelling
is
while
others think lifestyle changes and changing
in the type of Change the form of the verb
changes
food
as the ways to do it. In my conviction, change in the
lifestyle and the type of Correct article usage
apply
food
should be the first thing to adress
, in Correct your spelling
address
focus
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the focus
of
the goal of Change preposition
on
loosing
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losing
the
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weight
.
First and foremost, eating balance
healthy Wrong verb form
balanced
food
with relaxed
mindset Correct article usage
a relaxed
with
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and with
free
body can Add an article
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overweight easily in a healthy manner. What matters related to Correct your spelling
reduce
food
is the amount of calories that anybody takes per a
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day
and it's not only the frequency ,so if person
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a person
eat
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eats
vegitables
and fruits Correct your spelling
vegetables
instead
of junk food
, although
, they eat a lot with less
calories the Change the quantifier
fewer
weight
gaining
is less. Replace the word
gain
Furthermore
, one
must have to have a proper metabolism to lose weight
, human need a relaxed mindset with a proper sleep
to have it. Remove the article
proper sleep
a night of proper sleep
For example
, according to
many medicle reserches
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medical research
one
of the main reason
for Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
weight
gaining
is Replace the word
gain
the
metabolic Correct article usage
apply
disordes
, Correct your spelling
disorders
disorder
hence
, helping for
proper metabolism with Change preposition
with
lifesyle
changes will involunarerily help to reduce Correct your spelling
lifestyle
the
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weight
.
However
, the question arieses
whether dieting and Correct your spelling
arises
exercises
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exercise
also
can reduce the weight
of a person or not. When somebody does the
dieting and Correct article usage
apply
exersice
regularly Correct your spelling
exercises
theoritically
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theoretically
theoretical
persons
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person's
weight
should be reduced with time, but if the person is taking very high caloried food
during rest
of the Correct article usage
the rest
day
with highly
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a highly
stressfull
life , the diet and the Correct your spelling
stressful
exercises
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exercise
would
not help to achieve the expected result. Wrong verb form
will
For instance
, one
of my friend who runs his own business do the regular exersises
with 16 Correct your spelling
exercises
hour
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hours
fasting
every Change preposition
of fasting
day
, but he is so much addicted to the
fast Correct article usage
apply
food
and
he is having sleep just 3-4 hours a Correct word choice
that
day
,due to
his extream
busy work Correct your spelling
extreme
shedule
,and he is still finding difficult to reduce his Correct your spelling
schedule
weight
by one
kilogram.Hence
, exercises
and diet cannot act alone in reducing the Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
weight
of a
individual.
In conclusion, people can do Change the article
an
exersices
and can follow dieting programmes to reduce Correct your spelling
exercises
the
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their
weight
but if they failed
to eat healthy Wrong verb form
fail
low
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caloried
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low-calorie
food
with bad lifesyle
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lifestyle
practises
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practices
.their
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their
effort
will go Fix the agreement mistake
efforts
invain
. As Correct your spelling
extinct
such
this
writer is with the firm notion that its
important to change poor Replace the word
it's
it is
food
choices and bad lifesyle
to lose Correct your spelling
lifestyles
weight
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