Two maps show the change of a coastal town, called Pentland, from 1950 to 2007.
The maps illustrate the changes in the layout of
Pentland
coastal town from 1950 to 2007.
Correct article usage
the Pentland
Overall
, It is evident that it drastically changed from an industrial and grassland area in 1950 to a residential spot in 2007, with many new constructions.
Looking at the details, On the east side
of the town, over the 57-year-period, a grassland and an industrial area placed in the north of the road
, changed to a
parking with a number of shops,
a park , and a swimming pool next to it. Remove the article
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Also
, a cinema was constructed on the southern side
of the road
in 2007, in a place which was a land full of grass in 1950. Similarly
, in the area of grassland on the northeast side
, 5 shops were built next to the road
and 3 apartment buildings were erected on the northern side
just next to the coast. Moreover
, a bunch of houses were made on the south side
of the plan with a new road
in the middle to access them.
It is note mentioning that a yacht marina was located in the sea which is on the north side
of the town, And all These are connected through 2 main roads and a few sub-roads.Submitted by soroush.nezami on
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