IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

Write a letter to a community college in America which invited you to talk about your country. In your letter Accept invitation and suggest preferable dates Tell them what your talks will be about And what equipment you require them to arrange

#community #college #america #country #invitation #dates #talks #equipment
Dear Sir , I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I have received your invitation. I do appreciate much! I will have to go to London next month to give a speech at Middlesex University. Would you be able to book a conference room
on
Change preposition
for
show examples
 23 of July as I will come to
US
Correct article usage
the US
show examples
 after London ? At the moment , there are two topics I can think of . Those are Digital Marketing or Web Design . I will confirm
you
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
the topic next week so that you can publish
Correct pronoun usage
it in
show examples
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 your school website. During my lecture , I will need a projector , a laser pointer and a
bluetooth
Change the capitalization
Bluetooth
show examples
 microphone .I will collect it one day in advance to prepare. I am looking forward to seeing you soon. Yours faithfully , Sandi
Submitted by sandimyahla13 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Content Development
Consider expanding on why you chose 'Digital Marketing' or 'Web Design' as topics to give more insight into your expertise or interest areas.
Writing Style
Remember to use more varied sentence structures and transitions for a smoother flow and to enhance readability.
Accuracy
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and date formats to maintain professionalism in your communication.
Task Response
Your letter succinctly addresses all parts of the task, indicating a strong understanding of the request.
Organization
Logical organization of the letter and clear paragraphing demonstrate good coherence and cohesion.
Tone
Polite tone throughout the letter ensures appropriate communication with the recipient.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: