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Band 4.5

Write a letter to a community college in America which invited you to talk about your country. In your letter Accept invitation and suggest preferable dates Tell them what your talks will be about And what equipment you require them to arrange

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Dear Sir , I am writing
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 letter to inform you that I have received your invitation. I do appreciate much! I will have to go to London next month to give a speech at Middlesex University. Would you be able to book a conference room
on
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for

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 23 of July as I will come to
US
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the US

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 after London ? At the moment , there are two topics I can think of . Those are Digital Marketing or Web Design . I will confirm
you
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apply

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the topic next week so that you can publish
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it in

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in
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on

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 your school website. During my lecture , I will need a projector , a laser pointer and a
bluetooth
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Bluetooth

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 microphone .I will collect it one day in advance to prepare. I am looking forward to seeing you soon. Yours faithfully , Sandi

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Content Development
Consider expanding on why you chose 'Digital Marketing' or 'Web Design' as topics to give more insight into your expertise or interest areas.
Writing Style
Remember to use more varied sentence structures and transitions for a smoother flow and to enhance readability.
Accuracy
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and date formats to maintain professionalism in your communication.
Task Response
Your letter succinctly addresses all parts of the task, indicating a strong understanding of the request.
Organization
Logical organization of the letter and clear paragraphing demonstrate good coherence and cohesion.
Tone
Polite tone throughout the letter ensures appropriate communication with the recipient.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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