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The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below indicates the average
of
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air
pollution
 produced by
Industry
,
Electricity
generation
 and transportation in 2012 in
China
, America, Japan and Australia. Measurements are by
PPM
.
Overall
,
China
 has the highest
pollution
 rate in
three
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 fields
while
,
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 Australia has the lowest
pollution
 level in
two
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the two
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 fields and has a little bit higher level in
electricity
.
To begin
 with,
China
 is on the top with under 60
PPM
pollution
 in
electricity
generation
besides
, has the highest level
pollution
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 in transport with 70
PPM
also
,
China
 is
on
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 the peak of the chart in
industry
 with 80
PPM
. The second position is Amireca with 30
PPM
pollution
 in
Electricity
generation
while
, has less than 60
PPM
pollution
 in transport and
having
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 under 30
PPM
pollution
 in
Industry
. The third
psition
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position
 in depend
to
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 Japan with over 10
PPM
pollution
 in
Electricity
generation
 among 30
PPM
pollution
 in transport and over 40
PPM
 in
Industry
.
Lastly
, Australia
in
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in
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at
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 the bottom of the chart with
same
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the same
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 amount
under
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of under
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 20
PPM
pollution
 in all three fields.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, industry, electricity, generation, china, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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