The charts below give information on the age of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the age of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The pie charts illustrate the demographic data of Yemen and Italy's people in 2000 and the forecasting condition in 2050.
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, young citizens dominated
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Yemen's population in the past time, and adult men and women will be the largest number in the next several decades.
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, there will not be any change in the proportion of people in Italy in 50 years. Based on the given statistic, half of the Yamanese were people under 15
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in 2000, followed by
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in productive age that fulfill the 46,3% of the inhabitants. In the next 40 years, those teenagers will be all grown up and dominate the ratio of the population in 57,3%.
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, the number of younger generation will
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increase, albeit the number of elderly that remain the same. Reversely, there will not be dynamic
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in Italy, where for half of the century the dwellers will be
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above 15
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years old
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.
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