The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project.  

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
bar chart illustrates the number of individuals who attended
in
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Grandville Stadium after massive
imporovements
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improvements
improvement
in 2017,
2020
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and 2020
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, and predictions for 2030.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of
audiances
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audiences
audience
who went to Sporting Events in 2017 and 2020 was dramatically more than other events,
moreover
, it will be even more by the year 2030.
To begin
with, the number of people who went
in
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Theater in 2017 was approximately 10000 and stayed almost the same in 2020,
however
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it will rise
substantionally
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substantially
in 2023, and it is going to be roughly 50000. For sporting events, we can see
and
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in 2017 and 2020 the numbers
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really close to each other. In 2017 it was under 150000, and increased gradually in 2020
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a little above 15000.
Also
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they predicted that it will
has
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a slight increase in 2023. And
finally
concerts, in 2017 it was under 50000 and
then
rocketed significantly in 2020. In 2030 we will
witnees
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witness
a dramatical rise.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance figures
  • projected
  • improvement project
  • major enhancement
  • trend
  • time span
  • analyze
  • decrease
  • stagnation
  • growth
  • critical increase
  • forecast
  • overview
  • comparison
  • anticipated
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