Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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is a phenomenon which happens all over the world. In my opinion, Linking Words
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development has a negative interaction towards the Linking Words
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with, almost every country sells the same things for every type of item. Linking Words
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products
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and to find them easily because all humanity should have the same rights.
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people
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countries will lose money because of the decline of tourism. Linking Words
Moreover
, the personality of its human will be lost. Every man or woman will be similar and they will cannot express their taste. Specifically, children will have the biggest problem of all humans because they will not make a personality, they will not have choices and they will choose what others propose.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the sale of the same or similar things in every corner of the planet will become disastrous for humans and especially for children. we should not forget our culture and the history behind Linking Words
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. The only thing that we must do is to protect our culture from massification if we want our children to know where the start of our civilization was.Linking Words
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