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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
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The given line graph shows the growth in the proportion of populations in three counties,
Columbia
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,
Yamhill
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, and
Washington
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 in the state of Oregon from 1940 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is apparent that
Washington
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 had far higher citizen increases among the three counties.
While
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Columbia
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 and
Yamhill
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 had progressively risen between the years
of
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1940 and 2000. In 1940,
Columbia
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 had the lowest population compared to others. It was around 28,000 people.
Yamhill
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 had a citizen of about 30,000 people,
while
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Washington
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 had
highest
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the highest
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, which is more than double
of
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that of
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Yamhill
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. In 1970, Colombia and
Yamhill
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 had a small increase of 5%.
Washington
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 had a 50% growth of inhabitants.
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, in 2000,
Washington
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 had a massive increase in the number of residents by far from other counties, which is above double
of
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that of
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 the past 30 years.
Columbia
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,
together with
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Yamhill
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 had continuous raises by 20%, which is in the range of 75,000 to 90,000 people.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words columbia, yamhill, washington with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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