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A reporter complained about a new TV program that you like. Write a letter to the newspaper editor.– Describe your point of view. Say what you like about the show and why. Ask the newspaper to take some action.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Kiranpreet Kaur and I am writing to complain about an article which one of your reporters published about a Television programme I really admire. I felt disgusted about the unfortunate article
which
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that
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 the
reporter
 published with the heading "Fake stories of the crime drama".
However
,
this
 TV programme generally shows
the
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real crime investigation stories and
along with
 that it never fails to entertain the audience of
this
show
 with the thrill. I believe the
reporter
had
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criticized the drama with some distorted facts. Actually, the
show
awares
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aware
 the viewers about the crimes and how to save the public from the threats.
Also
, it depicts how the police
investigates
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investigate
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 the crime which is the most thrilling section of
this
show
. But, the
reporter
 thinks that the stories are fictionalized without any actual knowledge.
After
this
 story got published I reached
to
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 the director of
this
 series and he showed me the evidence on which he made the
show
and
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he
also
 told me that the publisher of
this
 story never reached him to know his side and it is just a way to defame his
show
 and could affect the
show
 negatively. Please ask the
reporter
 to write an article to clarify his facts and to get his apology in which he states that he will never write untrue facts. I hope you will take strict action on my complaint. Yours faithfully, Kiranpreet Kaur
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Vocabulary
Use a more varied vocabulary to express your points for further improvement.
Task Response
Consider including counterarguments to strengthen your position.
Grammar
Ensure consistency in tenses for a more polished letter.
Format
Verify the format consistency, such as maintaining a formal tone throughout.
Greeting and Closing
Successfully introduces and concludes the letter, maintaining a formal tone.
Organization
Organizes ideas into paragraphs effectively.
Task Response
Addresses the task directly with appropriate details.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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