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THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012
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The chart illustrates how crime categories
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 as burglary,
car
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 theft and robbery were changed in three different areas of Newport city
center
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 from 2003 to 2012. In 2003 ,as we can see burglary was the main player in
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 chart, with
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 little less than 3500 reported cases.
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 was not for
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long, because
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 it increased to about 4000
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 in 2004.
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 it fell sharply and continued to fall by 2008.In 2008 it reached more than 1000
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 of burglary.
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this
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 line stopped growing and falling a lot
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 and finished its journey in 2012 in the amount of just under 1500
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.
Second
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 type of crime is
car
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 theft. It is one of the biggest crime
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 in
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 chart. In 2003 number of cars that
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 stolen at around 3000
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.
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 statement
don’t
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changed
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change
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 until 2005.From 2005 to 2006 it
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 us a really big decreasing up to 2000
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 of
car
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 thefts.
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 figure didn’t change much until 2010
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when it reached a little more than 2500
car
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 thefts. It
don’t
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doesn’t
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 change much
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. As we can see, amount of robberies didn’t change much and the maximum that it reached was 1000 in 2004.
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, robbery has always been the main problem for Newport.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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