The two graphs below show the average hours or daily sunshine and temperature throughout the year in two cities in Australia.

The two graphs below show the average hours or daily sunshine and temperature throughout the year in two cities in Australia.
The two line graphs illustrate the average
hours
of
sunshine
and temperature throughout the year in two various cities in Australia.
Overall
, the averages of temperatures increased in both
Derwin
and
Melbourne
.
However
, in
Derwin
, the average
hours
of
sunshine
went up,
by contrast
, that of
Melbourne
is unchanged. In detail, the number of
Derwin
average temperatures made up 18 which was three times higher than that of
Melbourne
in January. The figures for
Derwin
and
Melbourne
average temperatures climbed dramatically before decreasing to 21 and 9 in December respectively. Regarding the average
hours
of
sunshine
, the indicator of
Melbourne
's average
hours
of
sunshine
ranked
first,
accounting for 10,
while
that of
Derwin
stood at 6 at the beginning of the period. In the following 8 months, the quantity of
Derwin
average
hours
of
sunshine
overtook the figure for
Melbourne
,
then
it remained stable, at 11. A decrease was observed in the number of
Melbourne
average
hours
, at 6,
then
it was unchanged from June to September. The quantity of
Melbourne
rose to 10,
whereas
that of
Derwin
declined to 8
at the end
of the period.
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