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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The two charts illustrate data on global
pinaeaple
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pineapple
 export by three major producers of pineapple around the world between 2009 and 2019, and the percentage of
cost
 distribution to individual
cunsumers
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consumers
 in the
year
 2019.
Overall
, there is a great disparity in production between all three countries across the
ten
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ten-year
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year
 period.
Additionally
, the distribution and retail
cost
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costs
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was
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 nearly double that of the profit made in 2019. In the
year
 2009, country B exported approximately
4.3million
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4.3 million
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tones
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 of
pineaple
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pineapple
, making it the main producer of that
year
.
Conversly
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Conversely
, country C only exported a mere
0.2milliom pineaples
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0.2 million pineapples
 that same
year
. Looking specifically at 2019, country A emerged
the
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 top exporter of the fruit reaching about 10.3 million. In terms of consumer
cost
,
distribution
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the distribution
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 and retail sector utilised the most capital reaching the highest percentage of 35 as opposed to profit and tax
that
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and
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 came in second and third position, each attaining a total of 18% and 16% respectively.
Similarly
, export
cost
 was the least expensive that
year
 making up a total of 4% of the total
expediture
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expenditure
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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